Join as Shikamaru...?

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Shikamaru Nara
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Thunder in the distance

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full name Shikamaru Nara
no nicknames {if any}
age may 17
gender-male
sexuality straight
occupation junior

I realized what I wanted to say

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Physical Appearance5'2 Spiky black, hair ina pony tail.BMI calculator }
Personality Shikamaru is lazy, rude, and violent
Strengths Shikamaru is very smart. He not scared to voice his oppinion. He is loyal to his friends.
Flaws He is very lazy, always getting others to di his work for him. He has a crush on Hinata Hyuga, which distracts him. He also holds a grudge on Naruto.
Drink?nah
Smoke?never!
Drive?sure
Drugs?he's not stupid
Partying?hell ya!
Family father
Residence apartment with his father
HistoryShikamaru moved to Tokyo when he was 10.He made a lot of good friends at school. His mom died when he was 11.

No big surprise

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Shikamaru has attitude, which makes him fun to have, he always has a funny comment. Sell us your character (figuratively, of course!)
Role Play SampleShikamaru, thumped down the stairs, framed pictes of his parents rattled on the wall. "Stop making so much noise!" chided his father. Ever since his mother Ayake died, his father snapped at him over every lttle thing. "I'll be late, there's money on the counter". Shikamaru sighed, his father was always working late these days. "I'm leaving" Shikamaru told his father, he grabbed his bags and walked outside, it looked as if it was going to rain. He knew he didn't have to be at school for a while, but his father was so hard to get along with. (sorry if that's to short)
Password if you've read the rules, you should know this.

But please believe

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Um...

Your App needs a lot of work. We'd like at least a few paragraphs for each section, and make sure you fill out every section completely - several key sections aren't filled out at all, like the reason why we should take your character over anyone elses' and the password that lets us know you've read the rules completely and thoroughly.

In particular, some aspects of Shikamaru's personality seem very strange, and you don't really make much of an argument to back your choices up. In particular, you state that Shikamaru has a crush on Hinata, but I don't think those two characters have even spoken in canon (ie the manga and non-filler show episodes), and has a grudge against Naruto. As canonically they are pretty good friends, this seems really... odd. Also... violent? Since when? It seems like Shikamaru does everything possible to avoid violence, especially compared to the rest of the Konoha 12.
Your strengths and flaws need a lot of work: we would like a short paragraph or at least a sentence or two for each trait, and his personality section should be at least a paragraph or two detailing how he acts and sees the world.
Since canonically Shikamaru does actually smoke, or he has in the past if it isn't actually a habit, what is your reasoning behind saying he 'never' smokes? This seems very inaccurate.

We specifically asked that the RP sample be at least 300 words long; this is usually at least three or four decent-sized paragraphs. Copy and paste that section into Microsoft word or a similar program and do a word count.

I'm sorry, but I don't really think that your interpretation of Shikamaru is really what we're looking for on the site. If you'd like, however, you may have one additional chance to fix your application. Check out some of the approved apps to see the kind and amount of info we're looking for.